Oh cool. I love that you're doing a horror story in a labyrinth setting. I actually just posted my story description yesterday for the first time (it is also takes place in a labyrinth). I love the way you describe the catalyst, that your character gets “sucked into the stonework”… Neat!
Nice! Love the feel, the music, the choice of images.
One small suggestion: at 12-14 seconds in, when you have the genre and word count show up, it's difficult to read because of the dark words on the dark background. Maybe outline the words? Doesn't have to be white, a light grey might work, but right now they're really hard to see, and they're a kinda important part of the pitch.
Ellie – that's great advice. I never noticed that before. Thank you so much. This is the first time I've tried to make one of these – it's very exciting!
Your video pitch is delightfully creepy, lol. The black and white was a nice touch, very moody. Also loved your intonation on “Jack the Ripper” and “Mr. Hyde”, it was… disturbing, but in a good way. Sounds like you've got an awesome gothic mashup here, I'd definitely read something like this — great job!
Oh cool. I love that you're doing a horror story in a labyrinth setting. I actually just posted my story description yesterday for the first time (it is also takes place in a labyrinth).
I love the way you describe the catalyst, that your character gets “sucked into the stonework”… Neat!
I like it. Good luck 🙂
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Thank you so much! Really appreciate the feedback. Ooh I'll go and check out your story description. Labyrinths rock!
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Can I just say, I love your voice!?
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Oh man I'm blushing now! :$ lol
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Nice! Love the feel, the music, the choice of images.
One small suggestion: at 12-14 seconds in, when you have the genre and word count show up, it's difficult to read because of the dark words on the dark background. Maybe outline the words? Doesn't have to be white, a light grey might work, but right now they're really hard to see, and they're a kinda important part of the pitch.
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Ellie – that's great advice. I never noticed that before. Thank you so much. This is the first time I've tried to make one of these – it's very exciting!
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Hi Fiona,
Your video pitch is delightfully creepy, lol. The black and white was a nice touch, very moody. Also loved your intonation on “Jack the Ripper” and “Mr. Hyde”, it was… disturbing, but in a good way. Sounds like you've got an awesome gothic mashup here, I'd definitely read something like this — great job!
John Krissilas, #40
http://www.johnkrissilas.com/
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Ha! Disturbing in a good way – I like it! Thanks for the kind words! I'll make sure to have a look at your pitch too!
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LOL – a very good way. Cheers 🙂
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Nicely made pitch video too.
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Excellent! Sounds like a creepy, super fun read 😀 Good luck in the contest!
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Nicely delivered pitch. It felt spooky!
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Your pitch is great, but I call cheating with the awesome accent! How can any of us Americans compare? 😉 #26
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Not only is this a really good video… but I want to read this! Good job!
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I LOVE this video! NICE JOB!
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